About Myself
Subject: About Myself
Dear Prof. Blackstone,
My name is Ahmad Mismaaruddin. I am currently pursuing the telematics programme at Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT). It is a wonderful experience to be taught by you for this particular module. Your exuberant and creative teaching methods entertained me and make me look forward to attend the module every week.
To begin with, I am a football enthusiast. For me football is one of the sports which requires good communication as it results in better morale for the team. Apart from that, football is also a form of break from my work and studies.
I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with diploma in electronic and computer engineering. This particular diploma enables me to be proficient in both engineering as well as infocomm technology. My desire for knowledge of advance vehicular technology, resulted in me pursuing the telematics program as I always wonder how the technology that is used by companies such as Uber and Grab able to make a multi million dollars in revenue. This as well further inspires me to learn more about telematics as who knows I am able to come out with a different business model by using the telematics technology.
Moving on to my strength, I am a person who is adaptable to any kind of environment. Apart from that, I am a good listener. To elaborate this further, I tend to listen one's opinion before jumping to conclusion. However, I am not that good as a speaker. Considers this my weakness, I aspire to be a better speaker by the end of this module. Although my national service in the Singapore Police Force enables me to interact with the member of public, interacting with them is quite a hassle for me. With your guidance, I aim to be better at interacting with others.
To sum it up, communication is extremely important in life. Without proper communication be it in any fields, civilization would not able to advance to the point where it is currently at.
Best Regards,
Ahmad Mismaaruddin
Dear Prof. Blackstone,
My name is Ahmad Mismaaruddin. I am currently pursuing the telematics programme at Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT). It is a wonderful experience to be taught by you for this particular module. Your exuberant and creative teaching methods entertained me and make me look forward to attend the module every week.
To begin with, I am a football enthusiast. For me football is one of the sports which requires good communication as it results in better morale for the team. Apart from that, football is also a form of break from my work and studies.
I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with diploma in electronic and computer engineering. This particular diploma enables me to be proficient in both engineering as well as infocomm technology. My desire for knowledge of advance vehicular technology, resulted in me pursuing the telematics program as I always wonder how the technology that is used by companies such as Uber and Grab able to make a multi million dollars in revenue. This as well further inspires me to learn more about telematics as who knows I am able to come out with a different business model by using the telematics technology.
Moving on to my strength, I am a person who is adaptable to any kind of environment. Apart from that, I am a good listener. To elaborate this further, I tend to listen one's opinion before jumping to conclusion. However, I am not that good as a speaker. Considers this my weakness, I aspire to be a better speaker by the end of this module. Although my national service in the Singapore Police Force enables me to interact with the member of public, interacting with them is quite a hassle for me. With your guidance, I aim to be better at interacting with others.
To sum it up, communication is extremely important in life. Without proper communication be it in any fields, civilization would not able to advance to the point where it is currently at.
Best Regards,
Ahmad Mismaaruddin
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ReplyDeleteHey Ahmad,
DeleteI'm having trouble posting comments on your blog. Can you see me about this after class on Wednesday?
Cheers,
Brad
Dear Ahmad,
DeleteI am glad to learn more about you from this formal introduction about yourself. It is good to know that you have shortlisted futuristic goals to achieve in the future!
May I know if there is a reason for the difference in font size in paragraph 3? Otherwise, it will be a good practice to keep the font size of the entire document the same.
You may also want to work on the sentence structure for some of the examples below,
- I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with diploma in electronic and computer engineering
- To elaborate this further
- Considers this my weakness
Apart from those mentioned, the letter looks well written and informative. I look forward to working with you in class. Do feel free to drop me a comment on how I can improve as well.
Best Regards,
Clement
Thanks Clement for the constructive comments! I will work on those soon.
ReplyDeleteToday the problem I was having yesterday appears resolved, and I see Clement's feedback. I'll have to give comments later though.
DeleteDear Ahmad,
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this detailed reflection. We learn a lot about you in this letter. You've also included all the elements of the assignment. However, you have not included enough specific supporting details in a few cases. For example, you might have explained why "interacting with them(the public) is quite a hassle for me." In addition, when you state that you are adaptable, it would be good to give an example to illustrate.
Of course, I appreciate you liking the teaching approach. I simply want to gain all students' full support for the learning agenda.
In terms of language use, there are a few issues to consider and revise:
1. sentence structure
-- My desire for knowledge of advance vehicular technology, resulted in me pursuing the telematics program as I always wonder how the technology that is used by companies such as Uber and Grab able to make a multi million dollars in revenue. (+ punctuation errors + word choice)
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My desire for knowledge of advanceD vehicular technology resulted in me in ENROLLING IN the telematics program. I HAVE always wondered how the technology that is used by companies such as Uber and Grab IS able to GIVE THESE COMPANIES multi million dollars in revenue.
-- This as well further inspires me to learn more about telematics as who knows I am able to come out with a different business model by using the telematics technology. >>>
This as well further inspires me to learn more about telematics. PERHAPS I WILL BE able to come out with a different business model (?) by using the telematics technology.
2. verb issues
-- Considers this my weakness, I aspire to be a better speaker by the end of this module. >>> (verb form ?)
-- Although my national service in the Singapore Police Force enables me to interact with the member of public, interacting with them is quite a hassle for me.
>>>
(tense?)
Let's work on this.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Prof Brad,
DeleteThank you for the comments above. I will work on the mistake that you had mentioned.
Regards,
Ahmad
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